Before he gets that letter denying him to college, you need something like a title that says time has passed. The person in the video also needs to look older like he/she is close to going to college. You could also use some sequences in taking the test. Instead of having a 4 second shot, you could break that into 2 or even three shots showing a sequence of taking the test. This is getting better but still needs more work.
This is my third quarter project page for my PSA